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2012/12/14

Revised Essay 2-03b: Lindsay Lohan


I write about “Lindsay Lohan”. She is an actress and a singer. She has red brown hair and she has green eyes. She was born on July 2, 1986 in New York. And she grew up at Catholic's home. She has a father, mother, 2 brothers and a younger sister. Her sister is a model. Her father inherited trade and she grew up at the rich home. But he was arrested by securities fraud. Also after that, he was arrested for drunken driving and assault. He is working in the Christianity organization now. Her mother was an analyst of Wall Street. And now, she is a manager of Lindsay. Both of parents of hers were actors.
Her first appearance was about CM. She was 6 years old then. The number, her appearance to CMs are 60. There are so many! Then, she debuted a movie from Disney on 1998. The title was “The Parent Trap”. She became a popular child actor and she got Best Actress of the Young artist award on this movie. But, she took a holiday to study to be prior.
However, in recent years, she captures the spotlight in a private life rather than an actress and singer business in many cases. She is reported by the party lover as a troublemaker. But she was excellent as a student. She cannot stop smoking and drinking. She had arrested in a drug, drunken driving, and a violence incident.

"Freaky Friday" on whom she appeared recorded the smashing success which exceeds 100 million dollars in the United States on 2003. So she became a teens idol who represents the United States. The "MEANGIRLS" opened to the next year made a smashing success too. She acted as the host with the MTV movie award in 2004, and won the breakthrough acting trophy. And she is the teens choice award held in the same year and attained four crowns including the actress prize (comedy section) of a movie section. She was chosen as the 1st place of "hottest person TOP in the world 100" which the "maxim" magazine announced in 2007. However, "I Know Who Killed Me" exhibited in the same year was criticized severely. And she won worst Best Actress, Golden Raspberry Award and a worst screen couple prize. In addition to this, she appeared on "Confessions of a Teenage Drama Queen", "Herbie", "Just My Luck" etc.
Her debut album "Speke" put on the market in 2004 recorded the 4th place of the first appearance with the United States chart, and became sales exceeding 1 million sheets. She was not only an actress but singer business successful too. And by "Rumors" which is her music, she is criticizing paparazzi because she was disgusted with them.
Then, I write about "Freaky Friday" of the movie which became a teens idol who represents the Untied States. This is the remake of "freaky Friday" (Jodie Foster starring) in 1976. This is the comedy movie of the contents of the daughter of a rebellious age replaced the mother who refrained from second marriage. And in this movie, the Cookie in which the paper of the sacred oracle went into the inside called "Fortune Cookie" ate in the Chinese restaurant which parent and child performed leads two persons to solution. She actually sang on this movie and it achieved the singer debut.
Second, I write about ”Mean Girls”. This is a high school comedy movie. And this is remake of nonfiction story "Queen Bees and Wannabes". Kady lived in Africa with zoologist's parents. However, she became 16 years old, she has moved out in the suburb of Chicago in the US. There are a lot of persons so Kady is bewildered by the her first school life. And Kady makes friends with an mean three-person group. The pure girl become “mean girl” in this movie.
Third is about the movie which she appeared, “JUST MY LUCK”. This is so cute and funny story! This movie is a fantasy and romantic comedy day of the Lindsey Lohan star. Her role is very lucky girl, but She loses her luck in a certain incident to see good luck and becomes unhappy. I thought She is very miserable because She was feeling very happy and she didn’t know how bad that Oneself is unhappy. But she She knew the unhappy life. I think the drop usually knows the misfortune because it was happy and feels it even more strictly. And the story is very strange and funny. Do you know why? Because when the lucky girl who is a role of her kisses with an unhappy boy, the life of them becomes objection. This is so fantasy! Her Her performance is very charming and beautiful. I love her performance. Her role becomes unhappy and she lost her job, she was arrested.. and so on. She knew she lost her luck because she kissed with unhappy boy. She found and found and found.. but she can’t find the boy. She thought if she kisses, and good luck returned to herself, it is revealed that the boy is the boy! So, she kisses with a lot of people. I was very surprised to see the scene and I thought she was so desperate. Finally, she found the boy and kissed with the boy. But, she didn’t take him good luck. She did not want to make him unhappy. I thought she is really kind. The boy also want not to make her unhappy. So, they thought and thought, and they arrived at one result. They thought good luck reaches and comes if they kisses every time. They choose to share good luck in tho people. I thought is splendid because they decided assist with each other.
We love her role and performance. Her performance is really pretty! Please check her work and please watch the movies her appears. We think you will like her and we glad to you will like her!

Reference
Producer,David Swift.(Producer) & Director,David Swift.(Director) (1961). The Parent Trap. Lucien Ballard[Motion picture]. The United States: Walt Disney Pictures.
Producer,Mark Waters.(Producer) & Director,Heather Hach.(Director) (2003).Freaky Friday . Oliver Wood[Motion picture]. The United States: Buena Vista.
Producer,Mark. Waters.(Producer) & Director,Tina. Fey.(Director) (2004). MEAN GIRLS.Daryn Okada[Motion picture]. The United States: Wendy Greene Bricmont.
Producer,Donald Mark Petrie.(Producer) & Director,Amy Harris.(Director) (2006).JUST MY LUCK Dean Semler[Motion picture]. The United States: Twentieth Century Fox Film Corporation.
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2012/11/21

Essay 2-02b: Favorite Place

 New-s kan of Tsuruya is the best favorite place. It is a one of the part of Tsuruya. It stand on the Kami street. There are a lot of stores in it, for example, Starbucks cafe, franc franc franc, moussy, SLY, PLAZA and so on.

It has moussy and SLY. There are a lot of clothing shops and these shops are clothing shops too. These shops are very popular. A lot of people buy denims and clothes at moussy and SLY because these denims are very nice and clothes are simple. I love denims so I often wear denim. Especially, Many people love denims of moussy and SLY because denims of them are very nice shape. They have a lot of size. But I like moussy than SLY little more. And these shops clerks are very beautiful and slim figure! So I always think that I want to be slim figure when I go there.

It has franc franc franc. This store is popular from a broad age. It is sold cute and fashionable household articles. A lot of kinds of such as cushion, chandelier, lag, and glasses are sold there. There are a lot of people who want to collection in the future for their house and I want to decorate my house too. A lot of girls would love to live at the pretty and fabulous house in the future. So I wish this store will be not closed forever.

It has PLAZA. I love this store since I was a young. This store is sold a lot of things. For example, albam books, cosmetics, miscellaneous goods, stationary, imported confectionery, pretty covers of smart phone and so on. I buy schedule notebook every year because all of things sold this store are very cute. And if we want to eat something food made of foreign countries we can buy here. My favorite food is dry mango. I used to eat everyday. I am exiting when I am in there. Because of this shop, we do not have to go foreign country!


When we got tired, we go Starbucks cafe and we can rest there. It has a lot of menu and all of drinks and foods are delicious. When we are hungry, we often eat them. The food of the limited time offer is also sold in here. I would like to become try to eat them after I watched them.


 News kan of Tsuruya has a lot my favorite stores. So I go to there I can watch a lot of stores  and buy something. These are the reason why this is my favorite place. Please go here. I think you can enjoy shopping there too.

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2012/10/24

Essay 2-01: Buenas Tardes

2012/06/22

Essay 1-02c: KGU Life


 I introduce KGU. KGU is the center of Kumamoto. I think that Kumamoto is the most beautiful city in Japan. I am going to KGU now. There are many useful things in KGU.
There are a lot of useful places in KGU. We often use them every day. For example, there are Bakery, student dining hall and library. They are my favorite places and very popular places. I go there every day. Maybe you will also become so. You should get to know more about a KGU, and should enjoy university life. I want to help about it and I want you to enjoy KGU life.


One thing I think exchange students will need to know is to join the club teams in KGU. Because there are many club teams in KGU, and they are so popular.If you join the club team, you can enjoy your school life. Our club is held on every Wednesday. We are looking forward to holding on every Wednesday. And, I can make friends in my club. I often went to shopping with member of our club. The member of our club are so chummy. I have been to Aso with them at the midnight.  It was so fun. I last being laugh then. I enjoy my club. So you should join the club.

  Bakery is in 12 building. It has a lot of delicious bread. Cooks bake bread many times in a day. There are some drinks, soft cream, some kinds of soup and salad. Breads are cheap. But they are very delicious!!I like tuna-boat and kurumi bread. There is a very popular place. So there always are a lot of student, housewife and children in bakery. This place is very lively place. I go bakery every day.

  Student dining hall has a lot of kind foods. I like niku Udon. Student dining hall is larger more than Bakery and there are many people too. Some breads sell in Student dining hall too. We can receive food after buy a food ticket. We can buy very cheap for many food. Many students and teachers go this place. Curry is popular food in here. You can eat a lot of Japanese foods.

  Library is so large and many books and many personal computer. There are books of the kind of manga, magazine, news paper, news paper of English and picture book. And there are many books of many countries. So we can study many language. We can study and use personal computer in study room. We can watch movie. We can listening music. And there are a lot of interesting movies and CDs. For example, there are Harry Potter, High School Musical, Cinderella and so on. We can spend free time effectively alone or with friends. Library is one of the my favorite place.

 Another is to get environments that talk with professors at all time they'll want to know to be happy and successful students in KGU. KGU is very good professors to study. They are so friendly and kind. So, they are certanly there for you if you need them. I often don't understand how to study English and why study English. But good teachers lead me the right way. And they give me good advices. So you should ask professors if you want helps.

 If you want to study, reading books and watching movies, you should go to library!! I think you can enjoy there. And you enjoy talking with friends at bakery, student dining hall,  convenience store and unoccupied study room. So you can enjoy free time in KGU. I want to go there when I don't have free time because that place is so enjoyable place. But you should be quiet in library because many students are studying in there.

  Where is you want to go in KGU? In addition to these, there is a convenience store, LAWSON, smoking corner, benches and some ATM in KGU. KGU is so comfortable university. KGU is really large and big university. There are a lot of buildings in KGU. I am so tired when I walk 12 building for 14 building. I used to become missing in KGU because KGU is too large. Let's enjoy university life with us in KGU!!

 Now, I really enjoy life of KGU. I want you to enjoy this school life. In this univercity, you certainly enjoy your campus life. Let's enjoy together in KGU. Good Luck!I think that KGU is convenient school. Because KGU is the center of Kumamoto and KGU is building near the bus stops and station. So if you want to go shopping, you can go soon by bus and train. In fact, I always use the bus stop which is in front of KGU. It is so convenience and useful.

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I co-authored this essay with Mari. We used content from our previous, individual essay posts (1-02a-b).

Individual essay posts (1-02a-b)

Saho's revised essay (2012.05.23)
Mari's revised essay (2012.05.23)



Here are links to each of our co-authored essays:

Joint essay posts (1-02c)

Saho's joint essay (2012.06.22)
Mari's joint essay (2012.06.22)


2012/05/23

Essays 1-02b: KGU Life

  There are a lot of useful places in KGU. We often use them every day. For example, there are Bakery, student dining hall and library. They are my favorite places and very popular places. I go there every day. Maybe you will also become so. You should get to know more about a KGU, and should enjoy university life. I want to help about it and I want you to enjoy KGU life.

  Bakery is in 12 building. It has a lot of delicious bread. Cooks bake bread many times in a day. There are some drinks, soft cream, some kinds of soup and salad. Breads are cheap. But they are very delicious!!I like tuna-boat and kurumi bread. There is a very popular place. So there always are a lot of student, housewife and children in bakery. This place is very lively place. I go bakery every day.

  Student dining hall has a lot of kind foods. I like niku Udon. Student dining hall is larger more than Bakery and there are many people too. Some breads sell in Student dining hall too. We can receive food after buy a food ticket. We can buy very cheap for many food. Many students and teachers go this place. Curry is popular food in here. You can eat a lot of Japanese foods.

  Library is so large and many books and many personal computer. There are books of the kind of manga, magazine, news paper, news paper of English and picture book. And there are many books of many countries. So we can study many language. We can study and use personal computer in study room. We can watch movie. We can listening music. And there are a lot of interesting movies and CDs. For example, there are Harry Potter, High School Musical, Cinderella and so on. We can spend free time effectively alone or with friends. Library is one of the my favorite place.

 If you want to study, reading books and watching movies, you should go to library!! I think you can enjoy there. And you enjoy talking with friends at bakery, student dining hall,  convenience store and unoccupied study room. So you can enjoy free time in KGU. I want to go there when I don't have free time because that place is so enjoyable place. But you should be quiet in library because many students are studying in there.

  Where is you want to go in KGU? In addition to these, there is a convenience store, LAWSON, smoking corner, benches and some ATM in KGU. KGU is so comfortable university. KGU is really large and big university. There are a lot of buildings in KGU. I am so tired when I walk 12 building for 14 building. I used to become missing in KGU because KGU is too large. Let's enjoy university life with us in KGU!!

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2012/04/25

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2012/04/13

Essays 1-01:Letter to host family.


Hi. My name is Saho. I’m nineteen years old. I’m a second grader of KGU. I live in Kumamoto with my father, my mother, my elder sister, my younger brother and Moon of a dog. Moon is a male of Chihuahua. He is so small and cute. My favorite foods are meat, yakiniku, strawberry, fish, sashimi, sushi, mango, whipped cream and ice cream. They are so delicious. I dislike a green pepper, bitter food and ghost. I like Disney and shopping. My hobby is watching a movie.

Do you  know Kumamoto? Kumamoto of my hometown is famous for raw horse meat, karashi renkon, Kumamoto castle, Kumamon and Mt. Aso. Mt. Aso is proud of the No. 1 caldera in the world. Kumamon is a character of Kumamoto. Have you ever eaten horse? You may have resistance in raw horse meat. However, this is the culture of Kumamoto. And raw horse meat is so delicious. Karashi renkon is somewhat hot but the feel to bite is good. What is your favorite Japanese food? What Japanese food do you dislike? Have you ever come to Japan?

Tokyo Disney Resort is very famous in Japan. I want to go Disney Land in America. Have you ever been to there? I have not gone there. But I have been to Tokyo Disney Resort. Tokyo Disney Land and Tokyo Disney Sea are located in Japan. Two are collectively called the Tokyo Disney Resort. It is a wonderland and so beautiful. 


Especially the Cinderella castle is very beautiful. But Kumamoto is a very good place too. There are beautiful sea and rivers, mountains and a lot of nature. Please come once. What is famous in your hometown? Please let me know.

I want to go visit you early. I’m looking forward to seeing you. I want to talk about various things if we could meet early. If there is anything you want me to bring from Japan, please let me know.


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